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Much better! I read it again and I like it even better than the first time. =) Well done, I like the changes you made. On the subject of nuzzly ...

if you're gonna post anything here, it might as well be serious.

amen.^

Hehe... grey ghost your review made me laugh. lilchoma, thank you for the review-even if it doesn't get the the point specifically, it's always nice to get an overall feeling ...

Okay. So now for the serious one. No offence meant by what I am about to say. well, there sits a man ---okay, first of all, you NEED to use ...

hahahahaha that was so dumb.

Hahahahahahaha.....sorry.....I found this amusing.... My name's Mary.

Thanks, I'll definitively keep working at it!

Thanks so much Sunny! Very very helpful.

thanks, time for revision!

thanks snoink, i'll check it out.

Jelly fish...hmmm.... :roll:

I say lets all go take a moral-boosting course! btw, lyrics to a hit song, right in that poem. go for it. =)

J. It's not your fault. Don't think that. Cause it's not. Beautiful poem, conveyed what you feel perfectly. But don't ever, ever, think it was your fault.

BFG, thanks, I'll work on this one a little more with all the suggestions you gave and try to repost it sometime soon. your comments really got me thinking. --Clue.