Young Writers Society

Wow. Intersting. Comapring snow to mud. I like that imaginary. I also like how as you read on, the words got angrier, and you got more power out of everything. I think you should keep it just like you have it. So, once again, awesome job, and keep writing.

Peacee

-Writing for love is a passion_

~Lexie~

i think you should minimize the repetition of word
it made the poem too lousy...
anyway i love snow that is why i have been intrigued
to read this.....

thats all....

Thanks!

Do you think I should change Blizzard at the end to Snow or keep it the same?

I love the repetition and the similes! VERY GOOD! I love the free verse and the "swamp mud" I think is what you said. I love it! I wish I could write like this. I hope I see more poems like this! Keep writing!

Thanks so much!

Bailey

Jelly fish...hmmm....

I like the idea of the repetition but it seems almost too sudden. I would say maybe try and add something in between the changing moods. And the parallel to jellyfish is a bit odd, it doesnt really get the point across clearly. Is there another comparison you could use? I think this poem could be great it just needs some tweaks and maybe some rewording. But its your poem so ultimately what you do with it is your choice
Keep it up