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This has maintained your standard of excellence. But there were a few grammatical mistakes: The Monday, early morning light pierced through the glass windows, waking up Sophia. You should have ...

This is a great preface - I get information about Sophia, I get suspense, I get the idea as to who the suitors are and I get a great setup ...

How could anyone rip that to shreds? It's an awesome piece of work written by an awesome poet. I like how you compare the subject to the sky and the ...

Fantastic! I love how you didn't turn it into a soppy mopey breakup story, but kept it light and relatively indifferent (not to say there's no emotion, there is!! And ...

Beautiful poem! I'm not sure about a metaphor, but does it mean that if you spend your whole life chasing something it may all be in vain? If so I ...

This is a cute little poem, I like the way it is written. However some of the rhymes are forced. This is my best example: When I was just a ...

This is fantastic! I love how you captured the end of summer in more ways than just the landscape, or just the temperature, or just the birds. It's great how ...

Nice work! This is a really good story. Only a couple of things I can point out. Firstly, yes my main character is called Bella...but I wrote this before I ...

Um... not sure what to think. This is more of a tribute biography type thing, isn't it? He’d turn papers after papers into his teacher who’d return them with a ...

This is a great poem, but I kind of expected it to be more than just a fantasy guy. I was kind of expecting it to be bit more about ...

I'm glad that, instead of going into a giant sonnet of self-pity about losing your friend, you kept the balance between the MC and their friend near mutual. You saved ...

This is very good. It is simple but not lacking. I'm not sure about this line, though: Cutting through earth Most musical sounds cannot do this. Almost all cannot do ...

This is an amazing piece of work! Really, I would love to see this as a novel. I know five people who would read it, and that's just in my ...

Now that you have edited it, I'm sure I must have much less to say. Love can shy. Don't you mean love can be shy? Maybe you mean that it ...

Alaska is a very interesting choice of setting. I'm guessing that you live there, but maybe you were just trying to think outside the box. Good job, either way. Just ...