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Well, I'll try not to repeat what others have said, so I'll go with this: I disagree. With all of these punctuation errors that they say, I understand this completely. ...

Wow. I wonder what what the note said? Was it a suicide note? Was it a love note? You're killing me here! I liked the way you did the stanza...But ...

Emotion. Tons and tons of it. I love it, the bitter tiny tangy tint of mystery in it. Wonderful :) :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: :elephant: ~Cheez_Burger~

Hmm. I like the piece. I'm not going to repeat what others have said before, because I'm thinking the same, but the syllables don't exactly flow to gracefully...Perhaps you could ...

Hmm. Interesting the way you told this story, but may I ask what had become of the boy? Where did he go? And what do the sun and moon have ...

Ha! Cute! It reminds me of a sonnet I once read...I an't remember the name of it, but it was by Shel Silverstien and was about spaghetti. Anyway, you should ...

Another great work! I must say though, you did repeat yourself when Jared asked for Alexis' name. You'll see :) I, again, am waiting to read the rest of this ...

Wow, Ellie! Great story plan! I absoloutely LOVE how this is going! I believe you should add some more people in chat the next time the MC logs in...or hacks ...

Wow! What a great prolouge! Is this your first piece? If so, then outstanding! I love the detains of you raking your claws down his arm! I can't wait to ...

Wow. This is an excellent piece with such emotion, it made me cry, remembering how I learned to pley the guitar and piano with my grandfather. All I can say ...

I agree! Going over the story a few times to check errors is something I've found very helpful in the past, and it also helps to see if you can ...

Holy Cow! You did a terrific job on this piece! I was very impressed with the way you portrayed the characters, and I picture the Dih as an overside Bear/Sloth ...

Wow. The way you portrayed these feelings running through the MC was great. But why did the MC kill her family? Was she holding a grudge against them? How did ...

i enjoyed reading this wonderful peice. it is very expressive and you really let out your emotions :). i could hear your tone in my head as i read it. ...