Young Writers Society

Prologue:

Thursday was when it first happened.

Ms.Carson’s third class was having recess, and everyone was enjoying themselves. The sky was a gorgeous bird egg blue, and the clouds looked like snow in contrast. The wind was light enough to blow hair away from my face, but not knock me down to the ground. I was waiting in line at the new slide that was recently built by the school. Ahead of me was one of my best friends named Lucian preparing to go next and as excited as a little kindergartner who just got ice-cream.

“This is gonna be so much fun!”, Lucian said turning around to face me. His cheeks were bright with excitement, and his eyes were wide with joy.

“Yeah it is”, I said enthusiastically.

Ahead of Lucian the girl in front of him climbed the starts and took off.

“It’s your turn”, I said pointing to the ladder.

As Lucian as about to ascend the stairs a short, round boy named Troy got in front of him, and begin climbing.

“Hey what are you doing?” Lucian barked at the boy.

I was surprised by this coming from Lucian. He was usually a good-natured person very down to earth and friendly. He was always polite to others, and dint mind people getting in front of him, or asking for something.

“Jumping you”, Troy said putting a mischievous smile on his face, and continued climbing.

I can’t be exactly sure, but from what I can remember within a five second time span Troy was on the ground with a bloody nose using his hands to shield his face, and Lucian was pounding him,his arm like a jackhammer going to work.

“Lucian get off him!” I screamed horrified by what he was doing.

All of the kinds by the chaos were chanting, and making bets as to who would win.

“I bet Troy’s gonna get up any minute and pound him...”

“Not with what Lucian is doing to his face...”

“Lucian Gallows get off of Troy this instant!!” Ms. Carson yelled running towards the scene.

Trying to help the situation I sprung into action. I was somehow able to pull Lucian off Troy, but still got pushed and hit sometimes. Once I pushed Lucian a few feet away I saw Troy’s deformed figure. His face looked bloodshot red, and his body was curled up in fetal position. His hands were on his face, and he was rocking himself back and forth like mental patient inside a ward.

“My face, my face, my face, my face”, he kept crying to himself.

Suddenly Ms. Carson was bending over Troy trying to pry his hands away from his face, and examine how badly he was hurt.

“Troy come on sweetie get up you have to go to the nurse”, Ms. Carson said sweetly attempting to sit him up.

He slowly got up looking out the corner of his eye trying to make sure Lucian wasn’t going to try to surprise attack him.

Ms. Carson looked around frantically until she spotted me by Lucian.

“Aydan honey go and take Troy to the nurse and tell her what happened okay”, she instructed me.

I walked away from Lucian and over to Troy who was still on the ground next to the teacher. Slowly he got up, but still covered his face wary of whether he was going to get attacked again.

“Come on Troy,Lucian won’t hurt you”, I whispered to him.

I wrapped my arm around his shoulder, and began carrying him towards the door that led to the school. As we continued walking I looked back, and abruptly stopped. Troy stopped at well wondering was I was looking at.

“Wh-what are you doing? Why are you stopping”, He mumbled his voice shaky as he spoke, yet I ignored his questions.

Lucian’s appearance caught my attention. His head was tilted towards the ground, and his body was hunched over. He seemed to not notice anything, not even Ms.Carson disciplining him. A few seconds later he focused his attention on me as if there was nothing occurring, and I could see something as wrong. His face was cold and hostile, and his eyes seemed to burn holes through me. I quickly turned away feeling intimidated by his menacing gaze, and continued to walk Troy back to the nurse’s office.

Thursday was when it happened.

Thursday was when things began to change.

So did anyone think the story was good? Please review my story because I would really like some tips,and critiques I could use for my story. THanks Everyone!Also everyone is in third grade in the story, and it's called "First Blush" because of the plot.