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I hate to be negative with my reviews, but this could use a little work. It's not entirely poetic, and it's very choppy and lacks that natural flow that is ...

Okay, so I thought this was really cool. It's not deep and poetic, with metaphors and and beautiful descriptions, but still, I like it. Poetry doesn't always have to be ...

wow, this is so great! you phrased it wonderfully, i love that first opening stanza, it really tied me in. the only mistake i noticed was the "her" when it ...

i love this! so creative and genuine. it flowed wonderfully, and i was almost sad that was all there was too it. I especially loved how you closed the poem. ...

fantastic job! this poem had a great flow, and it was descriptive of your, or the speakers feelings, I could easily understand the message you were relaying. This part was ...

Wow, this was a beautiful peice of poetry, your descriptions are fantastic, particularly the bit about the orchard, but it all was truly phenomenal. I envy you, I'm an awful ...

This was fantastic, I could really understand how you felt, or how the MC felt (was this a true story?). Your descriptions helped me understand the confusion, the anger, and ...

I really liked this, it was sweet and honest, which I always like. Good for you, writing a novel! I would say keep going, from this little bit it seems ...

Okay, so I pretty much love this. I can totally relate to this, except I knew the guy was a complete jerk..but he commanded my life anyway. He knew I ...

That was one of the best peices of writing I've read in months. It was seriously amazing. I'm a little bit bummed Ash and Cal didn't end up together, but ...

I can imagine her, breathing in your scent of wintergreen and smoke, entwining her fingers painted red in your curly black hair as you sway back and forth to the ...

it was cute, i liked it! but it was a little bit confusing. i think it would have been better to add in something about being one of eight in ...

it was nice, but it sounded more like a blog post. the end was especially confusing, you have to be born into it, but you haven't always been sarcastic? are ...

ok, here's what i think. it was nice, but that was it..nice. i think it would be better off in poetry than fiction, perhaps? but, i could see it working ...

this was such a beautiful story, it was so full of emotion. the part that hit me hardest was in the letter, talking about how she set aside the workboots. ...