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Hi there! Great story! I loved the idea of it and am very excited for this story. I liked the humor in the characters and friendship between them. I loved ...

Great story! It was really creative and your description of the setting was very good. I also liked how I was able to picture what her wings looked like. I ...

Hi Deanie! Great work of writing! Your writing was very descriptive and pretty much free of errors. The only thing I have to say is that in this paragraph: I ...

Hi Gravity! Wow, there isn't much to critique on this writing. Good job! I really liked the concept of the perspective from an inanimate object. I have never read a ...

Hi Annardj12! First off, great writing! I think you portrayed the characters being drunk very good! Most reviews point out the grammar errors which could be fixed easily. The main ...

Hi 90skid! You did a really good job here. The writing was very descriptive and you took your time with it! Good job! Since this is the prologue, I am ...

Hi DeepCrystal! First off, great writing! I love how long this piece of writing was. Something I suggest doing is stretching out some scenes so that it is more noticed ...

Hi GreenTulip! First off, great subject! This idea of magic and powers sounds very cool and unique. There are some grammatical errors which I think could be fixed if re-read. ...

Hello! Very nice scene you have going here. I did catch a grammatical error that was suppose to be "thought", not "though" but that is understandable. There isn't much to ...

Something I would like to say is that if this is going to be the actual start of a novel, there should be more background information. Everything is happening a ...