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  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Like Clockwork

    This was so amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love the last sentencce!!!! please make another post continuing the story!! Maybe we could collaborate on it or something!! I know you wanted a review, ...

    Mar 7, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: random words

    ok, i am going to analyze this paragraph by paragraph. #1) what does this mean? " When you love someone hurt you." ? also, when you wrote "the first poem ...

    Mar 7, 2015
  • Short Story » Romantic, Spiritual Re: I can't

    for me, this was a very uplifting poem! so great job with that! I had a couple questions though that could be improvements. when you said: "Is this how it ...

    Mar 7, 2015
  • Poetry » Realistic, Health Re: Another Truth: Friendship

    this was an amazing poem, although, i didn't understand some of it. For example, you rhymed, the didn't, then you did again. What was the point of that? I liked ...

    Mar 7, 2015
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, Mystery / Suspense Re: Then it all came crashing down...

    OK, so there are a lot of things you could improve on here. 1) you used italics A LOT!!! i get in the last paragraph when you were having somebody ...

    Mar 7, 2015
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Bluebird

    This was a great story!! I'll bet if you expanded this, it would sell amazingly!! I might even buy it!! I don't really have any critiques, but i have one ...

    Mar 6, 2015
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: One In A Million

    LIke you said, i didn't read all of it.. but from what i read, it was good. YEs, there are some imporvements, but i think it all starts with the ...

    Mar 6, 2015
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Fantasy Re: She Held A Flame in her Hand

    First off, THIS WAS AMAZING!! I felt like i really understood it, even though i can't relate. So, excellent job to you. You said you wanted a mix of feedback, ...

    Mar 6, 2015


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