cat4prowl

awesome awesome awesome!!!!!! a couple things though (just little ones) I felt pity for the builders of this place! no exclamation points, i think it looks really strange and reads ...

Another awesome chapter! The only thing i noticed was that some of the sentences were awkward. i had to read them a couple of times. Revise, revise, blah blah blah... ...

I liked it! Short, sweet, and to the point. Also, there was next to no awkward rhymes, which can ruin a poem. I noticed, though, that the rhyme scheme was ...

first of all, i would like to say... i absolutely love the idea! it was pretty good but this is a critique so i have to tell you whats wrong ...

okay first of all let me say that was fantastic. i loved it! i think it is a great way to start a story. the imagery was great and the ...

that was fantastic. i loved it, its got great character and potential. i understood the part of your story with Kathira's woods so dont worry, your visuals were pretty good ...

umm... one thing to say. keep writing! (while i hunt down the first 2 chapters) i like it; very suspenseful, good details, nice dialogue. Fantastic! the only thing i can ...

this was good. you made me wonder about your character and if i knew where to find more i would read it. the idea is unique and the writing is ...

some of the phrasing is awkward and contradictory. as for the underlined phrases, maybe you could take out the 'always' in the first line and also the last line where ...