carbonCore

The fight began in a flash. The fist came sooner than Adriana had expected. She ducked low and swung her fist in a counter-attack. In moments, Dorian and his goons ...

You write in an interesting style, one I haven't seen before. It might work, it might not - personally, I was a little bit confused by the way the events ...

No technical errors on your part, it seems. I might have formatted this story slightly differently, but that's neither here nor there. Fun to see the world's pantheons joining up, ...

I looked up and found myself in the middle of Cityplace near Downtown West Palm Beach, Florida. I looked around, [There was a semicolon here, and I removed it. It ...

[Firstly, notice how I formatted your story with line breaks. Try formatting it this way - it makes it a lot easier to read] I looked at my small body ...

Hmm. No, I disagree. - Spelling and grammar make the vessel of the story. If the vessel is malfunctioning, whatever is inside it will not make it to its destination. ...

This is amazing. Simply sublime. I re-read this story several times, and there's still nothing I can find wrong with it. Odd, that: usually I chop apart even the best ...

Hello there, Dreamer. I don't believe we've had any contact on this site yet, other than my posting a rebuttal to your article about talking heads. :) Here I am ...

...eh, it was pretty good. >.>

"Mom?" I called out, as I opened the front door to the house that I lived in for twenty three years until I had moved out to live with my ...

Okay, let me explain it like this. Writing is similar to thought, yes? It's an ever shifting being, a state of thought that's constantly growing. Why write the same thing ...

Heya B! Good job on completing your first knightly assignment. I've ditched the pony for a diesel-powered motorbike, and then drove over that jerkass prince because he insistently wouldn't notice ...

You didn't end this story, and after typing up half of a review ranting about this fact, I understood the reason behind this. There are a number of things the ...

I recently had a pet betta fish named Alphonso. He died a few weeks ago. No date/time cards warned me of his passing, though. :( Anyway, that aside, on to ...

Hello, hello, cC is here to review. Loved the opening. I like abstract scenes in general, which is why I really loved (and still love, I go back to re-read ...