captain.classy

Hai there! Here as requested. So, what I really like about this is the dialogue. It's so realistic, and really puts me in the moment. You write it so that ...

Hai there! Here as requested. First off, grammar is a big thing with me. I'm not going to sit and point out everything that was wrong in this, because there ...

Hai AAAM! This is the end...? Seriously? I see no ending here. You leave me with so many questions, and there really isn't a conclusion, a resolution, or a climax! ...

Hai there! Completely adorable. What I don't like about this is the slang you used. It's not typical for a writer to use things like 'slo-mo' in their stories. I ...

Pecan! So I agree with the first reviewer. Poems, as with stories, do have characters! Your narrators! Who is your narrator here? Do you know? It sounds like a child, ...

Hai there! This is so cute! Though, something irritates me about it. Maybe it's the obviousness of it. Everything is all planned out. Instead of saying specific jobs, can't you ...

Hai there! Nothing moved except the small gusts of air flowing through the valley. This is a bit awkward to me. I would say something like the small gusts made ...

Hai there! This was a wonderful poem. It has everything a person can relate to: love, hiding their true self, feeling ashamed. It's a wonderful poem and a pleasure to ...

Hai there! I have to say, once I read the title, I knew exactly what this was going to be about. But, you surprised me with your writing. This flowed ...

Hai there! I really like the story in this poem. It really makes sense to me, and is something I can relate to. I liked how you didn't try to ...

Hai there! So I'm failing to realize the concept of this poem. I like the imagery, and your theme is nice, too. I don't, however, know how it possible relates ...

Chapter 1 It wasn’t fair. What had I done wrong? Did I upset her? I felt so confused. Redundant; repetitive. It already sounds like he's confused, there's no reason for ...

Hai! Here, as requested. I really like your main character. She had innocence to her, but was still sarcastic, like any teenager. She actually reminded me a bit of myself, ...

Hey there buddy! So I really liked this. Your sentences flowed well, and you explained everything perfectly, and not list-like, which I admire. There are so many unanswered questions; I ...

Hey there! It was nice to hear your side of this event. I feel like it's such a not-talked about event that some people think it never happened. of course, ...