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I lol'd. What can I say. Anyways, one part that bothered me stylistically was: She works hard for the money Always, there is an excuse She works hard for the ...

Hey Noelle :) I'm going to provide you with the honest critiquing you requested :D. I'll start by saying that I like the deep concepts you're trying to convey in ...

Hello fruityfortissimo :D So your poem is pretty good, but I'm going to help you make it even better, so here goes: 1) Right off the bat, your first stanza ...

Hello, ChiquitaPeroPicosa :) So I like your poems' honesty and use of rhyme, but I have a few things to point out; first of all though, I'm going to tell ...

Howdy Jenna :D I second everything Baywolf had to say about YWS, and I hope you have lots of good experiences here. Though as part of this site is doing ...

I did, however, feel that the second to last stanza about the childhood dreams and stagnation was a little forced. That is, I didn't feel like it flowed with the ...

This poem, for me at least, sums up a lot. Though I'm not sure if you were going for a summarization or embodiment of emotion in your imagery, or if ...

This is an interesting little narative, stress on the 'little' part XD. But being serious now. It's a very different take on a 'short story', but then maybe it's just ...

So, I really liked the imagery in this piece, especially the bit about squishing the bug, not sure why but that detail really spoke to me :). The only real ...