canislupis

“I’ve had enough of this,” he announced as he heaved himself up. “Having to use the back door all the time.” He stomped over to the corner where his diminishing ...

Hi there! I really enjoyed reading this story, but before I get to overall comments, I think I'll just jump right in: I closed my eyes. This was it. I ...

Why is this so short? This could very easily be combined with the next segment. It's not even really a prologue, since that is, by definition, a section that does ...

Ok--I'll be honest. I only got about 1/3 of the way through this. Why? Because a) it isn't spaced out which makes it very hard to read, b) this was ...

Ok, here to review as requested! Now, a lot of what I was going to say has already been said. ;) So, here is what I have left: What I ...

I agree with dreamy, to an extent, but I also have to say how much I liked the imagery. From the moment I read your title I really wanted to ...

Oh wow, I really loved this. The description and such was just wonderful. Because Antigone's already gone over the nitpicky type stuff, I think I'll just talk about the first ...

I liked this--especially the way you clearly took the time to proof read before posting. Here are some things I noticed that you may want to look for: 1. Character ...

Hey! I loooovvvveee this (sorry for all the extra letters. That's just how much I love it. XD) I'd probably second Snoink and say to change the title, but that's ...

This is seriously disturbing. :) Which is good! Oh, and welcome to YWS! You're already featured! Wow, that's really impressive. :) Now, on to the review. I noticed a couple ...

acting in it’s own rebellious way Typo: It's=it is. Should be 'its' I took a deep breath in, the salty smell of the ocean filling my senses. I tripped a ...

Hey, Here is my review as promised. Sorry this is a little late. :) Anyway, here goes. 1.Exposition I was surfacing from a dream I didn’t want to leave. My ...

Hey there! Thanks for letting me know. I'm still really liking this series, but here are a few things I'd watch out for: 1. The MC is a little too ...

I love this.. the way it dwindles off into one word sentences at the end is really cool. I'm really no expert at poetry, but I thought I'd add a ...

A quick note-- I didn't find this boring, but I do thing this is way too long to be posted in one chunk. Also, I've learned from painful experience not ...