canislupis

this wasn't the most original piece, but for the mosr part it was well written. I agree with the previous reviewer on the confusion part. ;) The way you posted ...

This was funny and almost acurate.:) The previous reviewer summed it up pretty nicely, but I had a few things to add. The ending is kind of weird. Rearrange some ...

OK, pirate, This was very good... I am really creeped out by this . YOu have an excelent idea, and it was well written with fairly good description. Wow, this ...

Short post=short comment. :D There are punctuation mistakes in the writing. I won't point out all of them, but having mistakes like that in the writing means you don't care ...

I agree with little lucy about the first sentence, also you should redo this sentence: 'She looks your way with mischievous, dark eyes;' maybe just rearrange the order a little ...

pretty good, understandable, almost beleivable. however, you need to clear some things up. I haven't got time to give a line by line review, but I just thought you could ...

wow. This was pretty good. You need to watch your commas and grammar, but other than that it was ok. I think you should develop the main character more. Especially ...

Sniff sniff..... Anyway, this was really good! very beleivable in the way it was presented, no problems with grammar or anything, and the spelling is almost immaculate. For once I ...

This is an interesting beggining to a story, but here are a few comments I had: First of all, as I have gathered, you posted your story in two places, ...

Hi! you should have told me about this story! anyway, my comments are as follows: I always love stories where the inspiration is actually from something that happened, or that ...

this was interesting and it kept my attention. you did the graphis parts pretty well, and the descriptions weren't to bad. I actually think you could take this down from ...

you've got a nice idea, a good character ideas and an ok beggining. When you edit you should focus some energy on the grammatical side since I noticed a few ...

I came upon this sotry by chance, and I have to say that I am glad I did. it is very attention gripping and exciting to read, and you had ...

This is very good for: "your first story" Obviously you have edited it, and it seems to have worked out pretty well for you. I foubnd the beggining to be ...

great job, I really like your approach and the style in which you wrote, and there are no obvious grammatical or spelling errors, so good job there. what's with the ...