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Wow... That was very dramatic. I liked it, especially the way it was so punchy and short. Here are some things I'd watch out for: 1.) Mechanics! You don't have ...

Like I’m some Barbie that some freak decided to dress up. I sighed, grabbed my purse and walked out of the stores front doors. First sentence: repetition of "some". Second: ...

I love this series. ;) #3 “Hello, Mr. Ash. Do you like the viewing arrangements I have set up for you. In one minute, if you have not positioned your ...

I agree with OverEasy. ;) A few other things besides spelling: then you notice me and smile that beautiful smile, then I realize it the girl behind me. I think ...

Exactly--Pride and Prejudice for the win. :) Not to dis Little Women or anything though, because I loved that story two, but it just didn't have the depth that pride ...

Wow, that was---slightly disturbing. Still, very funny. I cracked up. Besides, it's not even that far fetched... Sigh. Anyway, just one or two things: “Shut up, shut up, shut up! ...

Hey there! This is great--every time I read one of your works, they seem to be better and better. Here are a few suggestions: 1. just a quick tip: instead ...

Hey there! I like this. Luckily, gruesomeness doesn't really bother me. ;) While most of the things I found have been pointed out already, (thanks, Mr. Knightley) I did notice ...

My life couldn’t of been that bad I think you mean "couldn't HAVE been that bad" I know what your thinking now. No, I’m not one of those Gothic kids ...

Hi there! No nitpicks today--there were a couple of errors in the beginning, but nothing a good going-over wouldn't cure. Oh, wait, there is one nitpick: The sky was crystal ...

Hi there! I love this. Nitpicks first--I didn't notice many mechanics-type errors, which makes me very happy. Thank you. he didn’t move. “Well,” he said, “goodbye then.” “I’ve gotten goo

Hi there! I like this. It is slightly confusing, but I'm guessing you'll explain some things later? There are quite a few errors, though, so I would suggest a good ...

Hi there! While I really enjoyed this story, I think it may be more of an action/adventure type story than other fiction. That said, I'll leave that up to the ...

Hi there! I’m excited to read the rest of this... And whaddya know? I'm the first reviewer! Ok, here we go... I was escorted to my house by the same ...

Hey there, The link worked fine. :) Thanks! Here is your review as promised. Now, on to the story. Okay so I'm not from Africa nor do I think I ...