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I enjoyed reading and reviewing your piece. Thanks for letting me look at it!

I'm sorry I got lazy at the last three quotes. It was really cold where I was sitting. I wanted to help, though! :D

Now that my review is over with, I can spend time fangirling! I loved the strange melancholy with the undertone of rather perverse hope. You definitely brought what you wanted ...

Well, I couldn't really say. You didn't give any detail on Asa. Is she incredibly smart? Unbelievably, heartbreakingly (Stupid autocorrect! Heartbreakingly is so a word!) beautiful? And I don't know ...

You might want to read 'Violet,' because this is a continuation of that.

The POV character isn't a daughter. It's the wife.

From personal experience, yes, you can skip quietly. And she is skipping quietly because there are still sleeping people. And she is screening what her grandfather's saying for her mother's ...

Sorry I went on spiel. But I really can't decide how to punctuate something because I'm not the author. Leaving the punctuation off leaves your poem ambiguous, and the reader ...

This is what's happening with my grandfather, thank you for the comment!

The first and second girls are two separate people. I tried to go back and fix the unclear things. I, personally, wanted to see how I could do with second ...

We don't live there. We stay there twice a month. My mother doesn't get up early. I look just like she did when she was my age, though.

He has dementia. That's the reason for the title.

I tried to take a few commas out, but I have to say using commas is a crazy writing habit I've developed. I did fix a few I found that ...

:D I wasn't sure how well this would go over. Thank you, Iggy!

Thanks. I'll try to think of a... (flowy-er?) sentence to start it.