burgs2009

Hey. As I'm suffering an intolerable bout of writers block at the moment, i thought I'd do what I've been meaning to for ages and review some of your work, ...

Although the message was clear, the language wasn't. I have to agree with the others, having every word mixed up doesn't work, it's not how dyslexic people write. My sister ...

I liked this for some reason! :D I've actually written a poem in a similar style, just one word lines, i might submit it having seen someone else attempt it. ...

Great ending to what could be a great novel if you ever write it! :D I thought the imagary and descriptions were fantastic. The language was simple which made it ...

Good start to the book, i'm sure a lot of teenagers will be able to relate to her confusion and anger. The main thing i would say is that this ...

hi there! I definately wouldn't say this was a rubbish poem. but at the same time i'm not sure whether it is good or bad! :D The language you use ...

I loved the rhyming in this poem; I thought it flowed very well. Although I understand what you were trying to get across, I think the poem maybe could’ve done ...

Wow. I'm not quite sure what to say. I'd be a hypocrite to say that this was sick, because a lot of the stuff i write myself contains graphic violence. ...

I enjoyed this poem, although the punctuation and grammar needs some work. A journey that was new to me, Never saw anyone walk this path before I knew nothing except ...

Wow, powerful stuff! Just a couple of little pieces of nit-picking. Firstly I think you need to look at adding in a few comma’s after some of your lines, e.g. ...

hmmm, not sure about this. I'm a big Twilight fan but i still enjoy spoofs. I wasn't sure what you were going for with this one. The whole abusive father ...

Lol! I'm big Twilight fan but i loved this all the same. I'd like to have seen Bella a bit more feisty in the earlier books (perhaps not this feisty ...

a subject i'm all to familiar with! weel written on the whole, although in the line: As each day passes we grow more insecure, No longer the child we were ...

Although short, i enjoyed reading this and will have to look out the rest. I think most of the grammatical and punctuation mistakes have been pointed out so i won't ...

Hey day tripper. Really enjoyed your story. It was fun, sexy, frank and realistic. It's very with the times and sets an honest interpretation of todays youth - which is ...