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This is a really good, powerful peice. I got loads of detail and feeling from it, and I did really enjoy it. This is a good, well thought about peice ...

This is pretty cool, the only problem is, the word schmetterling doesn't need a capital letter. Also, I don't think you need to use those crazy words because people will ...

This is really good, maybe you could split it into stanzas so it'll look more of a poem. I liked all the emotion you included and you wrote it perfectly. ...

There's tons of errors here. Please change them like this: (Red is for things that need to be changed). “ H urry she’s coming” Taylor said franticly. “ H oney ...

Pretty good. I can't write much because I'm in a hurry but I'll try and write as much as I can. This is pretty good considering it's something you wrote ...

I found this very confusing. For a start, there is no title and there isn't even a plot written down! Not even a short description on what it's about. I ...

Er... I didn't like this at all. For a start, there shouldn't be a semi-colon after the word chelsea. Chelsea colon: Why couldn't I be her? Only needs one question ...

Yeah, no offence but posting this as a document is a little pointless. If this is supposed to be a short story, does it matter if it's too long anyway? ...

Hey, I'm here to review! This is very emotional, powerful peice of writing. I like it, not something I would have chosen to read, but to the end I realised ...

This is amazing! I love how the first lines just get you drawn in. I personally loved it and you obviously have a talent for writing poetry. The title doesn't ...

Hey, I'm here to review! Aren't you lucky? Okay, I'm just gonna cut to the chase. “I’m in the business of misery; let’s take it from the top.” The words ...

Whoa! This is awesome! It's so catchy and I can kind of get the tune in my head, so that's a good sign. This is my one of the first ...

This is pretty good. Can I just add one thing? The segments, or whatever you want to call them, are a bit too long for me. Maybe you could split ...

When I read the plot, I was wondering how it would be like. So then I clicked on this and I read it and I was so pleased on how ...

Hey! Wow, this is long, but long means good. This is actually surprisingly good. I liked it alot, how you started it off as: "It started with a baby," Very ...