brassnbridle

I think its great. Seriously, I have no complaints, and I didn't find any grammar or spelling errors. I personally like how its written, because it really lets your character ...

I just wanted to say I loved this! To me it sounds like a cross between the classic Rapunzel tale and Book of a Thousand Days . I really enjoyed ...

This was amazingly well-written- I didn't find a single grammar error or awkward sentence in any of it. That brings me to my only comment- length. The post is really, ...

I like that you started out right with the action, something to keep a reader interested past the first few sentences.Grats on the great descriptions, as well. I would've liked ...

First, I just wanted to agree with the posts about switching tenses, as that can make it rather confusing or just strange. Personally, I have a pet peive with present ...

I'm a bit confused about the second part. You said everybody died aside from the king and the general, who sound like their yelling back and forth with the king ...

I think your piece reads like a parody so far, as so many details (like how he got expelled from schools and whatnot) are so close to the main series. ...

I like how you kept pretty consistent with the books, but some of your paragraphs felt rushed. He felt this, she said that- I know you've probably been told or ...

Again, another good story. I liked the way you presented an insight into their history, the how and why your MC ended up working for a knight she doesn't like. ...

Well I really liked this. I thought it was well-done and interesting, though the actual poisoning I didn't get until I went through and read it again. I'm not sure ...

Interesting, I admit. Parts of it, like her dream, remind me of the first Percy Jackson book. Not sure if it's supposed to or not, but that's what i thought ...

I thought this one felt a little rushed, but it was still very good. I don't have anything to add to the actual story, so I'm going to nit-pick some ...

Good opening- first sentence caught me right away. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar errors, which is always a plus. I can't even see much to change- everything flowed ...

Interesting- I like it. You've added to the depth and mystery of the story. The punctuation was much better in the edited parts, but ran away again in the stuff ...

I'm afraid I can't think of much other to say than I like it! It's easy to read and engaging enough to want to continue, though a few stretches when ...