bookworm27

Alright, Booky here to review! Firstly, I really did like this piece (all of your writing is so darn good) but I have a few things: 1. "shovel straddled upon ...

So for a total fantasy/sci-fi geek like me, I;ve been exposed to a lot of writing where the author is throwing in more information than I can retain, and as ...

Hello! Booky here to review, comments in bold! Rebecca: She always said that the world looked brighter from her shoes Eeks! Somehow this sentence is grammatically incorrect. I might sound ...

This was very cleverly written-a welcome relief from some of the dry crapola one sees! There is a certain air, a je ne sais quoi, that one cannot attain by ...

So, here are my general impressions: You need more background information. it comes across as a bit odd to the reader to find themselves hurled into the plot line...especially because ...

Hello, Booky here to review, comments in bold! "Where can i find her?" He stumbled into the bar for the fourth time this week. I really like the opening-sets the ...

I have to say, I'm really impressed with this poem.Yyou obviously know the artistry of writing, and you shine here! Spectrum of col-col-numbers I think this means cold numbers, but ...

Hello, Booky here to review! Comments are in CAPS) It is dark. The winding labyrinth lets in no light HMMM NOT TO SOUND PICKY, BUT WHY WOULD THE LABYRINTH LET ...

Booky here to review, comments in bold! Accusing eyes pass somehow the word pass doesn't do it for me here, it breaks the flow an uncaring i know it's nitpicky, ...

Booky here to review! Comments in bold-enjoy! Glassy-eyed, hidden how about engulfed by spiderwebs? or is that my weirdo mental thesaurus talking? behind spiderwebs and a sea of ashen dust, ...

Dark clouds hover above my head They follow where ever I tread There is no day, only night Yet the flames of hope are my light Wonderful start! Nothing but ...

Allo! Booky here to review, comments in bold! Comment before i commence-I'm a big fan of line breaks. Big fan. Huge. So much so, that I will be that annoying ...

Hello! Booky here to review-comments in bold! Don’t cry child, Nice repeat throughout Don’t put up a wall. When you are feeling lonely, When they don’t answer your call. Side ...

Hello! Booky here to review! Comments are in bold: Abracadabra Nice start! I love onomatopoeias! He prepares for the stage, donning his crinkled, black plastic top hat I'd eighty-six the ...

Hello! Booky here to review-comments are in bold! My hair whipped from side to side Oh dear. Been listening to a bit too much Willow Smith have we? as I ...