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The rhyming isn'y great, but wow! What a fantastic way you have with words. Gold star for you :D Keep writing, Bkwrm

I love part two :D I think the MSN thing is great - and their disscussion gives you a much better idea of their friendship. Plus I'm definately going with ...

It's not really for anything in particular - I've just always been fascinated by magpies and especially the rhyme, so I tried customising it as it were. :) Thanks for ...

Ermm... these are the introductory chapters - so that you know who everyone is - which is why my characters aren't really developed yet, but I will definitely try to ...

This is really good. I can't see any problems that haven't been mentioned, so I'll just say that I think you've written a really poignant piece. Keep writing, Bkwrm

Thanks for your crits :D Sorry about the typing mistakes - can't type well at all. Bavaria exists? :( Why are all the best place names taken? No wonder it ...

The first one's good - it's quite funny. The second one seems kind of ... pointless. When you say 'Your dead' it should be you're as in you are. That's ...

I like it. Try cutting out the last paragrph altogether - I think it would be better without it. Other than that - great. bkwrm

This is beautiful. I especially like the way you've added the afterward - you could so easily have left it off, but it really completes the piece. There's not really ...

Thanks for your comments - it's nice to know you like my poem. I agree, the topic is fairly simple - after all, it's the usual story; stay too long ...

Cool! I don't have time to review it, but it's really good. Bkwrm

I know it should be 'any more', but that doesn't fit in with the rhythm, so 'no more' it will remain! Bkwrm

This is quite good but you need to go into more detail to make any real impact upon the reader - as it stands it is interesting but neither thought ...

I would just like to say that I pronounce again 'a-gayn' not 'a-gen' and that's how it should be in the song. You'll notice that when pronounced that way it ...

I'm lovin it Kim - you just keep drawing the reader in deeper and deeper. It's sooo good! Bkwrm :D