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hanks, Snoink. It does sound a lot better that way. I'll probably change that.

Whitegreyson, thank you :) I'd be honored if you used part of it in a poem, and you can show it to whoever you like. It's on a public forum ...

Thanks for your response. There were several reasons. It was their convergence that made her leave. And also, I feel that it isn't so much blatantly sad as it is ...

In terms of punctuation and capitalization, I took kind of a minimalist approach. I didn't want to include any punctuation that wasn't essential to the rhythm I wanted, so I ...

Jiggity: Thanks for your comments, I definitely understand the notion of details making a piece awesome, so don't worry about me thinking you're finicky or anything like that. I'm not ...

Thanks violetjune :) And Insomnia, thanks so much for taking the time to read through this and point out the story's flaws. I'll respond to you in parts so I ...

Navita, I really REALLY appreciate the fact that you'd take so much time to read it not just once but THREE times AND include a break-down of flaws you found. ...

Thanks for your review. What parts of it seem cliche to you, nayex?

Thank you, bluewaterlily. When I have a little more time, I'll go over it and try to change it to a uniform tense. It's a problem I have with my ...

As for the un-capitalized words, the strange placement was formatted a little differently in the original Word document. they were italicized and placed at different ares of the page, one ...

I like the kind of Shakespearean sarcasm tone you conveyed with this poem. The only problem I have with it is that the last couple lines seems kind of forced.

I love the feeling of this poem and the idea behind it, but there are a few parts where the rhythm seems forced. Other than that, it was good. I ...

This is the best poem by far I have read so far on this entire site. I have absolutely no corrections to suggest.

I absolutely love this poem. I love it so much.

OK, I really, REALLY like this, with some minor adjustments it would be incredible. I love the imagery and the personalization of the language and images in it.