biancarayne

Wow, I had no idea what his style of poetry was before I read this but you inspired me to look it up and tomorrow I'm going to attempt this ...

Some of this was definitely better than other parts, such as the lines that went: Yet I Take The Dive Off The Canyon Deep Into Your Hearts Inner Core To ...

This is definitely a very interesting, well-written piece! You do a good job in making Clara seem to come alive. However, there was a sentence in this that I found ...

This piece definitely had a very nice, beautiful flow to it that did indeed resmeble a piece of music. The only thing I saw was that the line that said ...

There were a few typos in here, but whatever, that could easily be fixed of course. As far as the story, it was definitely awesome! To me, it seemed a ...

So some of the words used in this like "rain" and "blood" do convey kind of a cliched image and idea...and this piece could be spiced up a little with ...

The imagery in this was definitely very, very strong. At first, looking at the title I supposed that this would be very cliche and unoriginal, but I'm happy to be ...

Well, a lot could definitely be added to this story to make it more dramatic and is, it does read kind of boringly and isn't something most people would be ...