This is a decent start.
As Ofour said, there isn't much to critique here and that is the reason why it seems to lead nowhere. You have introduced no conflict, thus its blandness. Write a bit more of this, and I am sure you will get more positive and more helpful critiques. On another note, after reading the small bit you posted here, I would like to warn you to pay attention to characterization. The lack of emotion and vibrance in your main character worries me.
And keep in mind that all critiques are suggestions and opinions and do not aim to hurt you personally. Most critiquers are only trying to help you improve.
Keep writing!
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