betwixt

thinking lotta how to be known That line doesn't make any sense at all to me. I had to read the poem a few times to really even understand what ...

I agree with Suzanne. You have really good imagery, but it doesn't really tie together or convey a meaning to me. The beginning is strong and so is the ending, ...

i didnt read the first one =] Prom night, Jack thought, she’s either going to kill me, or say yes. I hope she says yes. For a first sentence, it ...

I found it a little bit boring, to be honest. It's just kind of plain and simple...which can work, but I guess it just didn't here. And the word choice ...

I personally LOVE repetition, but it felt like you had maybe just a teensy bit much. Also the ending was...I guess disappointing? I don't know, I just wanted the girl ...

I pretty much agree with what everyone else. Flesh it out some, baby! You can make cliche work if you really want, just express it in a new way. Just ...

I'd stand in the downpour, Until twilight if you asked. Heavy drops of inky-coloured rain, Soaking me to the skin; I should've worn a coat. i kind of want to ...

I feel like you rely on a lot of pretty words in the first two stanzas, rather than conveying a clear and strong message. Pretty words are good, but maybe ...

What is a chair? A relaxing seat? A dining place? I'm not too sure about the questions, it seems you could use images to demonstrate that you are puzzling over ...