berrylique

wow, this is great. no major mistakes, except you spelt "want" as "wan't". i think the background voice was a great addition to the song. and i think you need ...

this chapter was ok. again, you have made a lot of mistakes. Syddles pointed them out. maybe you would like to tidy and clean this up? anyway, i am waiting ...

i thought this chapter was good. again, there were lots of grammar and punctuation mistakes, and i hope you will clear them up or something. i agree with Griffinkeeper. You ...

nice piece :) very funny and interesting. i love biology :D the experiments are so cool. i extracted DNA too, but from our own human cheek cells. i would love ...

i love this :D very original and funny. at some points i had to laugh out loud. and i couldn't spot any errors. i would love to see more parts ...

again, the ssame punctuation mistakes. but this chapter was more interesting than the first one. most of your speliing and puntuation errors have been ponted out by Lady Pirate, but ...

you have a nice theme here! just want to point out some of the errors: 1. in the dialouge, you must be careful of your punctuation. remember to end your ...

i didn't finish reading it, as my eyes were straining to read clearly. i will list out the mistakes: 1. you should have paragraphs, like introvert said. the reader will ...

let's see... Your harsh screams peirce the night i think the correct spelling is "pierce". Dry... yep, it kind of doesn't fit in. and i think ending it with a ...

it's cool. i like the way you showed your emotions, the anger and sorrow. i agree with the previous people. you should use a wider range of vocabulary, instead of ...

Yes, the title is spelt wrongly. And as the above people have mentioned, you have a few grammar mistakes too. I think you should give us more details, and you ...

i love this poem! i think the punctuation is all right, and i like it like that, full of mystique. i agree woth CK Lynn, that you should describe the ...

i see quite a number of punctuation and spelling errors. Also: The boy flips threw the pages of the old book It should be through , right? Life is a ...

i read Lyla's story from part 1 to 10, and i loved it! i think it was kind of realistic, and i liked your style of writing, but i hope ...

shouldn't ron defend himself from the imperius curse? and i agreed with writingluver and RED about Neville. He was too calm, and i think you should have him cry a ...