beccalicious94

After reading the prologue, I think this is a great continuation. Great job captivating the reader's attention and making them eager to read more. Write on and I can't wait ...

Interesting! The grammar and style need a little fixing up especially with parallelism.

I like the use of the snake as a motif for human's nature to easily give away trust. I would say this accurately describes fragility in under 150 words. I ...

This is such a powerful piece. Your use of dialogue to capture the characters emotions is extremely well done. Keep up the wonderful writing! :D

You definitely "brewed" a laugh from me.

I really liked the message of the poem and how you used the analogy of your shoe to convey something deeper. Nice work!

I really like this piece! I think you do a good job conveying emotion in the narrative style. Keep it up!

This is very succinct, yet very well put. There really isn't anything bad to say. I really love the emotion poured throughout the poem. Keep up the great work!