Published July 27, 2010
Underneath my unhurt skin,
Is a monstrous pain that lays within.
Questions of self-insanity arise,
Falling with tears, beneath my eyes.
Going up and down and all around,
My heart is breaking, without a sound.
Each beat has meaning of its own,
And in every beat the pain has grown.
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This is very succinct, yet very well put. There really isn't anything bad to say. I really love the emotion poured throughout the poem. Keep up the great work!
I liked it. It had a constant rythym. I'm probably misspelling that. And I enjoyed reading it. Good job.
yeah so this pretty much broke my heart when i read it
very nice job
To be completly honest i can relate to this poem which sounds kind weird, when you have had a broken heart like mine you never really recover from it but, once again you have delievered a well written good poem that I peronsaly like which is good haha, so like I keep writing and ill keep reviewing
Hey, Forsakin here! I was just looking for something to review and found this! I must say, as short as it was, I didn't think I'd like it, but loved it! It has a lot of meaning to it, emotions. It's very interesting. I must say, I don't usually read poetry, but this was great. I do wish it was longer though, maybe add some more to it! I do really love this. It's something I was happy to review! If you need me to review anything else for you, feel free to just PM me!
Very good, and feel free to ask me for pointers if you'd like.
Thankies,
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