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Please do read more! This is somewhat like the calm after the storm, which you did not get to see.

A hint: Delis is not protagonist numero uno.

Out of context, yes, the case file bit is quite boring :p

This is also not proof of concept. You have barely scratched the surface.

Every five chapters you get a prologue, so yeah the order is pretty confusing. Read prologue and chapter 1 for insight. This is self-contained, as it is a flashback.

While you may be saving points by putting everything in one link, but boy, does it scare people off. This is 12,300 words! If you want in depth, honest reviews, ...

There comes a point where someone's writing is so good, there's almost nothing to criticise. This is one of those moments. To commemorate, I made you a sandwich. It is ...

Interesting little piece. I'd like to see where the story goes, or where the conflict happens, but for right now this is a pretty good first chapter. I'm curious, is ...

play hell with someone or something Fig. to cause enormous disruptions with someone or something. (Use discretion with hell.)

Great review! They knew the doc and Feldman are rich because everyone working at the site is bring paid six figures when they're done, I.e. $100,000 or more. Paying a ...

Thank you! I'm so grateful you had a look and liked it! Please feel free to check out the other chapters!

Ahoy! Lots of beans here. I don't see a lot of issues with the story so much as I do the descriptive language, and matters of tense. Here's an example. ...

Explain it in the story. Not by telling me. By showing me.

It's actually a scant 5090 words, the spacing makes it much bigger. I hope this is not an obstacle for readers, after all I've known plenty of them to write ...

I really like the language used here, and the formatting gives it a unique read. I liked the last two lines the best. It really drives home the feelings and ...