ballerina13

I really enjoyed this. It had great flow and rhythm. It was inspiring and put a smile on my face! :D I loved how you used simple language and made ...

I enjoyed this chapter as well but I find that you are not really showing us what happened but telling us. Let us feel as if we know Lucy and ...

I enjoyed this one very much. I liked how you focused on the growing friendship of Eve and Jeremy within this chapter. I found a few spelling mistakes but besides ...

I am... intrigued to see where this will lead. I like the plot and feel that this a lot of potential. The first chapter really drew me in and to ...

Hello! Your story is intriguing. I enjoyed reading it. I have a few nitpicks though. First off, is the time period the Depression era? It seems so just by you ...

I enjoyed this piece very much. The plot that you have created is intriguing. I like how you had an aura of mystery as to what was going to happen. ...

As the reviewer above me has already told you about the grammar, I will turn my attention onto other things. I enjoy where the story is going and I hope ...

I enjoyed this piece very much. The only concern that I have is that there were spelling errors and in he beginning when you talked about the Titanic being 'unsinkable' ...

I found this piece interesting. The concept is different and that it what makes it a good read. You the scenes beautifully. Although, your character is lacking in details. Show ...

AS the other reviewers have already said, there is a lot of repetition. But, I will discuss something else. I love the way you developed your main character some more. ...

This was good but I found it lacking in physical detail.The plot was intriguing and I am interested in reading more of it. Your main character sounds interesting to learn ...

This poem is so sweet. It flows well and is very inspiring. The message is clear and meaningful. I loved it! I definitely think that you could lengthen it though. ...

This was interesting. I found a few grammatical errors and some words missing so just re-read your story and you will be all set on that part. I found the ...

I found this story interesting. It made you think. My favorite part was the last three lines. They were very powerful. You could definitely create this to be a longer ...

I thought that this was well written. At some parts it was a little hard to tell how was speaking though. You stuck the characters personalities very well and created ...