Published February 27, 2010
What am I to do,
When I feel like this?
All your love around me,
is what I really miss!
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This poem is so sweet. It flows well and is very inspiring. The message is clear and meaningful. I loved it! I definitely think that you could lengthen it though. Just a suggestion. Again, I loved it. Great job!
Hi! I think this is very sweet. It rhymes very well and flows nicely, and it's quite cute. I think the exclamation point at the end also adds to this effect. However, it sounds like it's just one stanza of a poem, and that there should be more to it. I think it would be good as a first or last stanza, or even both, but that you could do with more because at the moment, there is nothing much in the poem that tells us that it was written by you - anyone could have written it. Which is good because it means people can relate to it but I think people need more to relate to, and having more information about who you are and who the poem is for would give the poem more depth and just make it a bit more interesting.