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  • Poetry » General, General Re: Fall Through

    'When "Once upon a time" begins with no "happily ever after." That was my favorite part of the whole thing. This poem is really well-written though, in my opinion. When ...

    Apr 26, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Culprit

    I liked this.. It flowed really well :) It changed moods towards the end, but it worked.. [quote]Ecstatic, she leaps from the pyre of her maker Like right here, she's ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Blowing Flames

    This is so.. What's the word to use here? Maybe cute? Sure, I don't know. This is one of the sweetest, most well-written poems I've ever read, and it was ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: You're Beautiful

    This is beautiful :) Normally, I'm not one for romatic poems, but the title caught my eye and I HAD to read it. I love this. This part was my ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Dreams

    Hi there :) So, I really like this poem. You used good imagery, and I could definitely visualize the little girl trying to catch the butterfly.. Like, right her for ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Hopes

    I really liked this... Although there were some cliche words like "blue eyes, frozen water, dark brown eyes, and melted chocolate," it is a very well written poem. Most people ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Dumping The Boy

    I love this.. SO MUCH. This part's true with a lot of girls because lots of guys are stupid :) I hate your stupid friends. Every time I step into ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: please delete post

    I really liked this one.. To me, it was ALMOST remorseful? If that's the word I'm looking for. I don't know, but I liked it. The structure really stood out ...

    Nov 24, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Country, Really?

    When I hear a country song, One thought comes in my head. Just one more twangy baritone, And I'll soon be dead! They like to sing 'bout heartbreak, And other ...

    Nov 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Past, Present, Future.

    Hi, Angus! First off, I love how you divided the poem into three stanzas according to past, present, and future. It made the flow a lot better, and also easier ...

    Nov 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Rainbow of Life

    I really like the imagery you used in this poem. However, can a bird really sound feral? I wouldn't think so, but that's just my opinion. Maybe in yours, a ...

    Nov 24, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Glass For My Father.

    My favorite part of this whole poem, and the part that really caught my eye, was where it said I Will beg, plead, and bargain with God Saying, "I didn't ...

    Nov 24, 2011


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