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OK - since there's only one paragraph, it's a little hard to judge: context is always useful. But I'll nitpick it as best I can! When a friend tells you ...

I'd have to agree with most of what was said, but there were a couple of lines that I was really impressed with. You don’t run in circles, it doesn’t ...

Rhyming is hard... there are places it sounds a little forced, though I'm quite impressed overall: most of it flows pretty well. 'Moonlighting' is one word. Your subject matter is ...

If I could just say, that post scared me. Anyway, firstly: I'm a massive fan. I'm a sword and magic fan in a small way, though you won't catch me ...

Ah, I liked this, indeed I did. I was thinking "this will be stupid" when I read the title, and my word, it wasn't. nitpicking time: Jesus’s ass-kissing, self-righteous little ...

I am... sigh. I am a cynic. Yes it's a string of excellent images, but unfortunately - it's a string of images. Call me old fashioned and beat me with ...

Aye, I'm afraid I'd have to go with awkward: I've said it before and I'll say it again, I think rhyming poetry is only for people who've been doing it ...

The idea is good, and where there's a good idea, there's good writing, it just needs a little fine tuning, in my humble opinion: there are some basic problems, I'll ...

It's the old recurring problem with poetry: cliche. No matter how good the imagery, no matter how excellent the language, no matter how stunning the meter: if it's angst, it's ...

Ah, I do like this. One point: capital letters at the beginning of every line? Especially when you've let the last one run on without punctuation, it makes it look ...

It was an interesting poem, this one, but there were a few bits that I wasn't sure about: she left me wondering why she left so soon It doesn't read ...