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Sorry Cassie ): I didn't mean to make anyone feel depressed... It was just an idea running through my head for a while. Sorry!

I tried to put some line breaks into it, but I'm not sure if they are showing up...

Thanks for the reviews guys! If you want a free review, Explosive Pen, then you can just say the word. Otherwise, I really appreciate it! And yeah, there is a ...

Thanks. I was just looking for the opinions on the re-written prologue anyway. I'm not too fond of long ones either, and the blatant switch halfway from being about 'you' ...

Thanks for all of your comments YWS-ers! I have put the first/ second chapters up, and they should be accesible on either the first or second page of the action ...

Yes. I will continue this. For anyone who wants to read chapter 1, and part one of chapter 2, it s p int eh Action adventure fiction forums already. I ...

I'm sorry for bumping, but because this desperately needs some help, I'll give a free review to the latest piece of work of the first two people to review this! ...

Goodness! you make my prologue look like a 3rd grade simple sentence book. It was very well written and produces a moderate amount of suspense. The cliffhanger was not cliche ...

Please review... I'm thinking that this chapter needs a lot of work!

Thanks! I think I'll change it around. great to hear you liked it, just wondering what you think I should take out? Should I make the detail more vague, or ...

I'm going to have the first part of every chapter about his life when he was training, and the rest (a much longer section) about him in the real world, ...

Thanks Lauren 2010, and if anyone wants to read the next installment; Chapter 1, part 1, then you can access it at this link: P.S: It's about his childhood... feedback ...

No, sorry. I don't know who that guy is. But thanks for the review. I would like to point out though, that that the while point of the first line ...

Thanks Suuny and Eliza! I've changed everything around, for anyone else who wants to read. Thanks again for the reviews and I* am glad to hear that you liked it!

Thanks Dreamwalker! I know it's bad, so that's why I've put it on here! I'll go back soon and try to polish up what you've addressed here! -Asxz