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Hi, I'm not going to go into the nit-picks, just the over-all structure & flow of the piece. The Garden Chapel Everywhere Teresa looked, she saw black. Their clothing caught ...

Okay... so you say rip it to shreds... Here goes! My cell was dank, and it smelled. Just letting you be aware that your opening sentence isn't that good. You ...

Hi... Sorry I'm late, I had homework backed up! You kept me alive. Every time I thought that this would be it, this time the pain ... everything would surely ...

Hi, review as requested. I have had a quick glance over it, so here goes... :arrow: Okay, opening sentence: Six teenagers ran into a pitch black yard, on a revenge ...

“Yeah and you should see this spread. I didn’t know there was so much stuff you could put in your hair and on your face. Don’t worry Veronica, when Keith ...

Hi, here is your review on demand. >>I have to say thst you have some beutiful imagry in this poem, you have descriptions far better than I could come up ...

hi, i'm getting there! I'll be done soon! He didn’t know the political structure of South East and perhaps he found scrawny brunettes attractive. At the end of the day, ...

Hey, I'm back for more. ["] “Ahh, Delilah!” Kayla whined, removing her hands from Veronica’s eyes. “So Roni[s],[/s] ; did you finish the Algebra homework? I got stuck on like ...

Hi, sorry, I'm not too good at poetry, but here goes! I don't really get what's going on. Is it a person trying to move on from changing country, or ...

“Whatever.” Veronica crossed over to the pantry and found a blue box with “pizza crust” written across it in red bold letters. She followed the directions, dough splattering up onto ...

"Everyone said [s]that[/s] I was elegant, that I'd make something of myself and [s]that[/s] I was exactly like my mother. Of all those predictions only one was true[s].[/s] ; I ...

This story has potential, but it's really short. I think that you need to go through, fix up all of the greammar (MS word is best) and then bulk it ...

Hi! Here's the review you asked for: They all look [INSERT COMMA] but do not see; Just read through your work and put commas wherever you take a breath. Reveal ...

Hey, Here's the review you asked for! I take a single step backwards, my foot striking something I cannot readily identify. As my leg slides out from underneath me, I ...

Hello, Looks good... I shall review! First of all, what you have here is a preface, not a prologue. These thoughts came to me just as death itself faced me ...