ashleylee

I only read part one because I think you posted the other two in seperate anyway. This was interesting. It doesn't seem like a Romance story yet, but I'm guessing ...

sad, yet powerful... This was good. It was just a short story, yet you brought so many emotions into it. You let the reader guess what had happened before, what ...

Cute…but sad. Too bad that her dream boy isn’t what she thought… Wow, two weeks into the relationship and he confesses his undeniable love for her. What a conversation starter ...

This was decent. :D It was little-kid cute. Adorable, I guess, would be a better word. I do think you do a lot of telling, and not enough showing. You ...

Hey elephantwalrus! :D Sorry it took me so long to get to this. I have been SO busy lately…but anyway, back to your story… Of course, I loved it! I ...

A simply inspiring story. It had a message. And I loved it! All of your characters seemed solid. However, I would have liked to see more of this confrontation between ...

First, I found this WAY too short!  Why did you cut it like that?? I would have loved to read more… Well, anyway, some of your sentences were kind ...

Wow! I absolutely LOVED this! :D It was soooo CUTE! There was only a couple things that you need to fix: I didn’t know what class she had last period, ...

Okay, I'm not sure if all these corrections I'm going to point out are something that someone else already fixed for you, so just be aware of that! :wink: Well, ...

Night Mistress! I see that you have finally posted your new story! :D I was so excited to read it! But I must say, it was too short for my ...

Wow... What a sad, sad ending!!!! I can't believe you didn't let Ash and Cal get back together!!! :evil: Grr..that's makes me angry. But, at the same time, your writing ...

Yeah, I agree with GML that it was kind of like a list. Like a grocery bill: eggs, milk, flour, ect. You need to include some ACTION, some PLOT, some ...

Again, your real-life situations have me hooked! :D You don't beat around the bush. You just come right out and say how messed up their lives are. It's really cool ...

I must agree with you that I love scary stories too. But horror movies...I'm still if-y on :wink: But I thought yours was good. I think you could have made ...

I just seriously hope this isn't the end! :? If it is, I'll definetly express my some way! This was good. I missed the fact that Akshay was gone from ...