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Hey, Melkor! Long time, no see :wink: Anyway, I have your story on my comp because I can't be on the internet anymore (I mean by I copy/pasted your story ...

Wow. Very unique. I'm guessing you are describing, like GryphonFledgling said, a writing project that you worked so hard on, yet never trully finished. Or something like that?? Otherwise, very ...

Okay, I followed your advise and ignored all the caps and (...), which I'm glad I did. Otherwise, I would have been very irked by all those! :P With that ...

Hey, Max! All right, this is really interesting. First, as everyone has pointed out, this is poetry. But if you add a story to this, I think you have a ...

Yes, I agree with KJ totally. The people above maybe harsh, but they are being honest. They don't mean to be harsh, but they need to be fair when critiquing. ...

~Kelsey~ I only noticed one thing: His fur was black as midnight, sleek as if it had just rained, and his sinewy muscles moved smoothly as he walked. Don’t you ...

Okay Kelsey, I read your last message on your other chapter, and I guess I understand how your ghost can “feel” the atmosphere and such. But I do think you ...

Again, amazing use of emotions. You really have a way to express people’s emotions. You make it look so easy, using it with ease. :D Okay, well, I only have ...

Hey scasha! This is only a “chapter five” review. I will be posting “chapter six” shortly! Now, as usual, I love it! These kind of stories always make my day, ...

Okay, all I am going to do is copy/paste your entire story and make all my corrections that way. Well, here I go: Mark tried to scream, but as soon ...

Hey Kelsey! It seems that you put some comedy into your story. :wink: I especially thought it hilarious about the honeymoon scene. lol Anyway, I only have a few nit-picks ...

Creepy!! This story gives me the chills! Eeeehh! :? But in a good way! :wink: All right, first the nit-picks. He drew in breath to call out for help, but ...

Hey! I have a few nit-picks for you :D It was one of the rare nights you could see every star. It was one of those rare spring-like nights that ...

All right…this was different than anything I have every read. You have a very unique way to tell a story. Very, very unique. :wink: But that is a good thing. ...

Good, very good! :D The only issue I have is the part with her suddenly having a panic attack about being in California. Some of the emotions she was feeling ...