ashleylee

Adorable! A simple boy-meets-girl-story. Now, I must admit when I first read this, I thought this was going to be a little cliché. But the ending wasn’t! Very well done! ...

This chapter was good. I think I am finally starting to understand Jayne. It also seems like you have finally gotten the hang of description. Your first paragraph was phenomenal. ...

Good! :D :D :D But I must say, the first thing that caught my attention was your tenses. You need to pick one and stick to it. You went back ...

This was great! You did really well with all the ideas with her meeting the boys. When I first read it when you PM-ed me, I thought that these boys ...

This was cute! I read all three chapters today and I must say I enjoyed it immensely. However, I felt the first chapter moved WAY too fast for my taste. ...

All right :D Yes, I must agree that the ending was cheesy, but sometimes that’s what makes Romantic Fiction so lovable. But anyway, I do have a few things to ...

I only noticed one this and it is really petty: Suddenly, she heard the door bell ring. Doorbell should be one word. (told you it was petty :wink: lol ) ...

WOW!!! That is SO creepy. It reminded me of one of those psychos on CSI or something :shock: I just finished reading a detective book with murders and stuff and ...

Well…that was interesting. At first, I thought these “kids” I guess, were WAY older than you said they were. They acted like twenty-five-year-olds, not eighteen-year-old kids! And I think that�

Gosh, that was so sweet. I seriously “awed” audibly when I finished reading it. It was THAT cute! You did so well with this. I mean, I have read stories ...

Usually I don't read stuff like this...but shockingly, I really, REALLY enjoyed your story. Suspenseful and...erotic :wink: You did well with your MC too. We really got inside his head ...

Oooo, I liked this. It had a very suspenseful atmosphere. I am guessing that this is going to be a forbidden love story where the red-haired girl is part of ...

I think you did really well with the ages for high school and such. Everything seemed realistic. And I found nothing out of place. No errors that I saw. However, ...

I’m sorry but this was SO hard to read with all your slang in there. I had to sometimes read the sentences over a few times until I understood what ...

This was good…but I’m not sure yet how this is a romance novel. I’m guessing we will find out later…?? :D Well, on to the review! She slowly reached for ...