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Nice! As a child, I never thought of it this way, but now I see how this is probably better than a princess or villain. (Maybe except for the times ...

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Could have powered this poem more it it was more formal. Maybe a metaphoric voice of the baby inside some lexics from the semantic field of religion could have been ...

I think the ending could do with some tuning up. Got quite informal in the end.... Which threw me off. At first I thought it was about you in hospital ...

I like the while king, kingdom and Queen thing. Maybe you could've given the cat more nobleness, as an actual Queen. You could've taken advantage of using stubbornness m sibilants ...

As an improvement... I'd say use an even amount of syllables in each line? And through the first person may have been now emotional? But it really does convey a ...

Maybe this could have worked better as a lyric to song? I wouldn't exactly see this as a poem. But who knows? Maybe you have hidden song writing talents? Try ...