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I wonder If you could have indented your paragraphs and checked your grammar. Overall a great idea, though remember that spell check is your friend!!!! Also, when the character is ...

I'm kind of confused, about the envy part. I wonder if there could be a little bit more of a description. I Like that you chose to write a poem ...

I like your story. It has a lot of detail. I agree with the others, though. Even at a quick glance I saw the words father and ship a lot. ...

Really great points, amazing poem!

Great written! I like that the amount of detail! 8) .mem..mem..mem..mem..mem..mem.

I like that there is a lot of really great description in here. I like that the character has a personality. I wonder if your formatting could be correct(Sorry that's ...

Pokemon is plural, and it's not pokemons, it's pokemon. Good poem over all! It's definitely funny! Pokemon is awesome.

Really good, and really well written!

Really well written and exiting!