annaseale1998

This was nice - made me smile. I loved the last lines, really wrapped it up. It was nice that you had a generally sad poem, but somehow you gave ...

Firstly: '...and the director his own life scene.' Shouldn't that be 'OF his own life scene'? And also, there are lots of errors in paragraph six. Secondy, I loved this. ...

I enjoyed reading it, although the only problem I could find with this, other than the gazzillion spelling and grammar errors, is that this isn't really a story. It's more ...

I liked this because the explanations.. well, thay basically explained everything. When I read vampire books, they almost always never explain why vampires are vampires. I thought that you could ...

I espeicially love the opening and closing paragraphs, but mainly this: 'Everyone has a memory that they wish they could forget; a memory that haunts them every day. It can ...

This is really interesting. I loved the way you ended it, 'So bite the cold hard bullet of reality and ride the wave of Change.' That's really imaginative! Also, great ...

The problems with this is that you said 'a scary mutant ninja thing', and there is a lot of places that need some comas. Apart from that, it was quite ...

I really liked this. When I read it I was disappointed that it didn't rhyme (just personal taste) but when I got into it, I realised it just didn't need ...

I really liked this poem. The idea was great, and so were the words. The only problem is that the rhythm isn't constant. The first stanza is very jumpy, because ...

I don't think I've read a more beautiful poem. This was absolutely BRILLIANT, and I can't think of a single way to improve it, because it's already so amazing. The ...

I like how you've mixed normal, everyday stuff, like being 'somewhat-more-than-almost-friends' with more poetic things like 'jewels of the sky'. I thought it could of had a little bit more ...

I think this is brilliant. I love the rhyming scheme. The only problem was that in line three in the last verse, there's one too many syllables. Apart from that, ...

I thought you could have given it a better title, but I really liked the poem. Maybe end it with something about 'we've run out of time', because you've said ...