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Re: Watching Windows - Chapter 1
I think that bullies will never really get anywhere in their lives. for anyone that gets bullied, i know this may now make u feel any better at the moment ...
Aug 21, 2008 -
Re: One Last Memory
The leaves looked as though they were on fire—gold, orange, red—blending together into flames that licked the sky. They trickled down around him, crunching underneath his feet. He was headed ...
Aug 15, 2008 -
Re: No title yet haha :)
First, I felt that the story was very unrealistic. Nate Wellington was a bad-boy. He was one of those guys that you see pressing a new girl, against a different ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: A titleless tale (2) (rewritten)
‘Except to me! How could you do that Raewyn? Go running back their for that cat! You could have been killed! I their should be there Besides, I’m fine, I ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: My Own Worst Enemy-Chapter Six
I was totally different. And I can’t tell you it was for the better. Try not to start a sentence with and. I lost track of the days, I couldn’t ...
Aug 14, 2008 -
Re: The Key to my Diamond Heart
I like the plot but the dialogue isn't very believable. It sems as though your trying too hard to use good grammar "big words" xD I really like the story ...
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: Elaine and Edward
watch you vocabulary. "There was a man down the hall way. He was dressed funnily, not at all like her father dressed. His clothing was fancy, and he had a ...
Aug 13, 2008 -
Re: ????-Part 1
I think this is a very good story. I'm not much of a spelling and grammar critique. But, as far as context goes i think this story has an excellent ...
Jul 11, 2008 -
Re: The Six Letter Word
this story is really good it reminds me of things that i've done i mean people can really relate to it your a really good writer and um yeah honestly ...
Jun 5, 2008 -
Re: ???-Part 2
cute but i think you got that whole pushing the truck part wrong cuz it ou can push a truck two miles in 3 hours im pretty sure you'd have ...
Jun 5, 2008
