andrew.j.m

Dayum. This was long. But I read the whole thing, so it has to be good. I really really liked it. A lot. The character's are...deep. Like I know them. ...

This is good. Emotions are depicted, and I hope that you sent this to the son of a bitch you did this to you :] I'm not going to critique ...

Don't change anything in this. Everything fits perfectly. At first I didn't like the line "churning in the mud" because it didn't really seem to go with the flow of ...

The only problem I have with this is the you mention Twilight. I'm sorry, but I refuse to read that book. I'm not saying it's a bad book, I just ...

Usually as soon as it becomes apparent that there are people who aren't "human" in a story, I just close the book and look for another. But not with this ...

So I'm not the best at editing spelling and grammar, so I'm just going to tell you what I think about the ideas. I like where this is going. It ...

It's really short, but it really makes me want to read what comes next. I like how Adam is referred to as "Love" by "you". It shows that they probably ...

Towards the middle, I have to admit, I almost did start to cry a little bit. But since I'm a guy, I refused to acknowledge the tear leaving its trail ...

If you ever read the book Lullaby, there's a part in there where it talks about how if art is done well enough, perfectly, it can put people into a ...

I feel bad because I only send you good things about your work, and can't think of anything helpful to say. The only helpful thing I can say is....keep it ...

You amaze me. This poem actually scared me a little. I had to fight off the urge to look in the corners of the room for something coming at me. ...

This was great. I looked at it and thought it was way to short to be any good, but reading it...and wow. At first I thought this was going to ...

Alright, there are some spelling things you need to look into, but I'm not good with spelling. But I like how this is a different perspective than the last one, ...

Okay, not going to lie, when I read that people's hair stood up on the back of their neck when they read this, I thought...."Some one's full of herself..." I ...

So I really like the ending, the way you describe how he pretty much controls how you feel without even trying to. I think you really hit the nail on ...