anabelsinclair

No! No, they are not! This is so e.e Cummings -esque, that I couldn't help liking it. There is an almost stubborn innocence to the speaker. riding on the shoulder ...

Hello, A thin veil separates me From the pitiful leach mere feet away Do you mean leech? Because in this context, 'leach' doesn't really follow. Behind the mirror rests the ...

Oh wow. There was so much to wrap my head around in this poem. I like the overall structure, the short lines give the reader that brief pause to really ...

I know the feels. Just one more day I swear, Would you consider replacing the comma with a period? It will pack more oomph to the 'Speaker's resolve. Why is ...

Hello! For me, the best part of this work was its structure, the disjointed-ness of how it reads that gives insight into the 'speaker's state of mind. It almost doesn't ...

Hello Again! The story keeps getting more and more interesting. I have a few questions more: 1. What happened to the couple in the bar when he first stepped in? ...

Hello! I enjoyed the pace of this work, and your excellent use of description to draw the reader in. While he had told his friends to go, he did not ...

Ohh, nicely done! The words, the imagery, the feels! One question: Why sanguine bedroom? I just found that particular choice of words jarring. Though we laid, at the point Perhaps ...

This is a beautifully written and well thought out poem. I loved the steady voice all through, the words and imagery of 'messy' and 'edges' trying to 'fit', both of ...

Hello! This probably won't count as a proper review -- more like an encouraging comment -- but I have to say, I love this work. The dialogue is whip smart ...

Hello! I enjoyed reading this. Your character has a strong, clear voice that paints the words and images in my head. I like how the tone is both matter of ...

I enjoyed reading this. I confess not reading the preceding chapters but even this snippet is quite excellent! The bleakness of tone and imagery really underscores the protagonist's emotional and ...

Wow.... This is all good! The terror and confusion pervading this piece was gripping and very realistic. It took me a few paragraphs in to realize I was going back ...

I do agree, watching ballet dancers, it seems like you have the secret of defying gravity. I get the sense that keeping the rhyme and rhythm in this poem is ...

I like this! This story is charming, and funny and very well written. Its a fine line, blending your young protagonist's dry wit and tone with all the details and ...