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There was a few things I noticed that were a bit off: 'So he told himself. But even as he walk...' Unfortunately as a rule sentences cannot be started with ...

Dude this story is so cool, at first I was like, 'Wow how many kids do these people have?' Then I just got stuck in the story, you're a very ...

At this moment there is nothing to negatively critique. My mind is full of beauty, waterfalls, caves, and mountains. This little girl sounds like she has and will again have ...

It curls with the air currents, flickering With the shuddering of failing wings, As it drifts higher into the sky. It touches light, Going so much farther up. I miss ...

I must say that is the most fabulous poem I have read in quite a while. I love it, you have quite a way with words, so many people on ...

I like it, the story so far is running smoothly, there wasn't anything majorly wrong that stood out at me. The characters seem interesting and I definitely want to read ...

It's okay for your poetry to not rhyme. Poetry is about what you feel and things your going through or see and want to express. Beauty, pain and suffering, happiness, ...

Short but sweet, I like that. You have a great way with words and use them well. I can only really say critique wise to just keep on doing what ...

I read it a couple of times just to make sure it did indeed sound as great as it did during the first read through. It's so good. My only ...

Wow, I think this is one of the best I read content-wise yet. I tried to see something I could give some kind of feedback for, but I see nothing. ...

I understand about the whole site screwing up the format and what not. I'm more concerned about going from the alley to the roof and having to squint because of ...

I think aside from going from first person (I) to 3rd person (he) it was very interesting, it told a story from someone's point of view. I felt like it ...

I think aside from a few spelling mistakes (spell check works wonders) just read your stories aloud or to a friend and listen for what doesn't sound right, and fix ...

I have to say I think some people on this site are far too anal, I mean I thought I was anal, damn. I love your style, the imagery is ...

Your story could be really good if you spiced it up a bit, right now it doesn't flow very well and I got bored after the first sentence. You want ...