alwaysawriter

I liked the ending--kind of puts you in suspense for what will happen next. I noticed a few things but I will go easy on you. The sky too blue ...

I liked it. I did notice a few things, one in particular: "Morning" Put a period after morning. You know, maybe easier". Period BEFORE the quotations. Other than that and ...

I liked it. She only knew about his feelings because she had once walked in on him and Madam Beautram, the tiger trainer, in the act. I feel bad for ...

That is something one of my friends would do; I'd be the one convincing and begging her not to. Anyway, I liked the story. I had trouble finding what day ...

It was okay. Maybe you should expand on the main character; after all, she's the main character for a reason. What does she look like? The only description you gave ...

I liked it. You can tell that it was set in an earlier time because of how unacceptable it was for girls to be climbing trees, compared to now, where ...

I thought it was a good story. Really short but good. I saw a grammatical error but I honestly have no idea how you can fix it; probably because I ...

It was a good story. I did notice a few things though. "Como estas angelita? How did your day go?" Angelita should be capitalized. "Oh corazon, my day wasn't so ...

A lot of grammatical errors; you put either too many commas, commas in the wrong place or none at all. Honestly, did they think she graduated from UCLA by luck, ...

I understood none of that but it was good anyway. My poetry received responses, usually rejections, with notes dashed across the page, or atop a line: "searing but unfocused," "radiant ...

Sometimes, the paper-skinned vets pressed pennies into her small palm. Sometimes, folk just spit. Too many Sometimeses. One right after the other doesn't flow. But the fountain didn’t look like ...

I liked it. I haven't read any of the other chapters so I don't know much about Mae but it was good anyway. If you haven't already written another chapter, ...

Hi. I'm in 4th period. Hehe--she completly forgot to give us our exam. We'll probably take it Monday or Tuesday. Sorry--off topic. I saw no grammatical errors except for a ...

It was an okay story. Here's some things that caught my eye: I found this in a lot of your sentences. We just met your second cousin", JK informs. The ...

I haven't read any of the other chapters but this chapter is good. A good beginning place and good ending place. There are some things that confused me though: If ...