alohajuice

"This is the exact poem I wrote for the love of my life when he had to move far away. " I love when writers give some background to their ...

I liked it. It was very pretty and it pretty much reached its goal: to be a pretty poem I agree with Mr. Pie, this line doesn't work: For winter, ...

I didn't like the song. I really didn't like the exaggerations because they seem very unrealistic. In this case you should write it containing more truth then exaggerating because it ...

The repitition of lines was annoying. They didn't work for me. I don't clearly understand what the poem is about but it seems like it could be much better if ...

I didn't like it but the topic was interesting and maybe you can go back to it if you want and fix it up. the rhyming is very weird in ...

Nice poem. Extra points for talking about the love before the heartbreak. The imagery you used was great I loved this line 'Eyes of the deep green forest I would ...

it was interesting. i liked it to tell you the truth. "Only Ghouls and Ghost came out to play." do you mean ghouls and ghosts? and why are they capitalized? ...

"Love is the worry of loosing a soul mate." Losing just has one o. "Love is the worry of learning to hate." i didnt like that line. it does not ...

hmm. what influenced you to write this? if you have no experiences or nothing has influenced you to write this, that would be the weirdest case. this writing seems like ...

that image is striking. "Her woes whisper as silent as the wind, but howl loudly as old memories are awakened." that was beautiful. and so was this, "The heart is ...

the beginning was nicely written. it reminded me of the beginning in New Moon "She screwed her face into an awkward smile, and me, unsure how to reply" me should ...

i honestly didn't like it. the first two lines were good, leading to a promising song. but the whole song seemed flat "But I’m too blame for this crime" Too ...

i think the whole idea to the song is very interesting and it sets itself apart from mainstream music. the idea of you singing a song, or praying to your ...

since other people pointed out the grammatical errors, i'll leave it out. but do brush up on your grammar. if you are from a foreign country, know that grammar is ...

paralyzed is spelled wrong. it has a y. not an i seems like a sweet, short and simple song it reminded me of don't forget by demi lovato. the coldness ...