alleycat13

I loved it. The title was what brought me in and you delivered. I can so easily imagine this to a upbeat pop melody. It drips with nostalgia and fun. ...

I absolutely love the idea behind this poem. A thousand white feathers fly into the air as I rip my pillow in half. Its contents floated softly with the breeze, ...

I liked it alot. Short and swee. I loved the last line-- it made me chuckle. It hurts, and it feels good. I think this line is weak. one third ...

I'm not much of a songwriter, but I'm going to give you my thoughts. Look at how hard I tried, seeing everyday how you pry. Shadows creep the walls with ...

I enjoyed Cell. I disagree with Haruno Sakura, who said that it needed to be shorter. Stephen King is known for how long and indepth his stories are, for how ...

I really enjoyed this piece. As a huge Narnia fan, I found this very accurate and interesting. I actually cried. I admit it. The only thing is when the doctor ...

Hello brokenwings. Overall, it's a good start to a poem, but there are somethings you might want to change. I have no heart, I’ve lost my mind I have no ...

I liked it alot. I think a brief authors note in the beginning might be a good idea to explain the Islamic terms, but I also think that the narrative ...

I liked it, but it's going to be a while before I read it again. There was no climax what so ever. It platued at the birth scene and then ...

Wow, pointed and good. As sketches/poems, they're awesome. I love this imagery--> Wheelchairs with spokes like snipped guitar strings and gutted seat-cushions that leave little breadcrumbs of foam beh

I'm pretty sure that's the most entertaining piece of "romantic"fiction I've read in a long time. My only suggestion is to put in some more 'he said' \'she said' because ...

Very cool. Content-wise, I can't say much, except to wonder who the speaker is appealing to in the last stanza.---> Oh supreme lover! Let me be better than I am. ...

I like it alot. I like that you chose to use first person and address the reader. That makes it much more pointed and personal. I could describe them for ...

I agree with niteowl. Lose the "who are". I think you can leave it out all together. Your imagery is amazing---> His face shines radiance, with eyes that dream of ...

I'm not sure. I listened to the audio and read it outloud to myself, but I'm not sure what I think. Prehaps thats a good thing? Maybe. I agree with ...