alabasterwolveness

Alright... Well this does seem a little choppy. Now I am like this as well but I dont really follow this at all. (No offense) You could make this flow ...

Ok... This really was not enjoyable for me at all. There were a lot of mistakes that really bugs me! If you are having that many mistakes then you should ...

Ok... Hiya there, I liked the story but... You could go into depth with the character. I had a hard time wondering what a tiefling was. The other characters were ...

Wow, that was really inspiring! I mean, Im totally speachless! I cant write poems worth anything! Which really sucks cause my mom is a poet. But anyway, it was extremely ...

I liked the poem, it showed alot about you and how you felt. To me it is though as it spoke from your heart, your true feelings about this person ...

Really all I have to say is AMAZING! The poem is great, I love the message that runs through it all. The way you discribe yourself through all those things, ...

I kinda don't understand the story at all really. The ending was nice yes, but really its a story I dont understand. You also missed a few "" around a ...

"Sometime TODAY Barry!!!" I really don't think a story can have multiple exclimation points... Lugging these heavy sacks up the hill. Again. And again. Don't only use one word, just ...

Hey, I really loved your piece. I think your grammar is very neat, just my question is why do you change the peom's format? It the beginning it doesnt match ...