ajruby12

Ha, well, the argument for slavery is absolutely full of holes, so I tried choosing points that weren't quite as absurd and horrible. But thank you for the review!

Well, different people have different ways of reviewing. I appreciate it all (well, at least most of them. Some people just are no help at all) My writing needs help ...

Thanks for the review! As always, it will be of great help. I think a few of the things you pointed out, such as Akilah talking about Bri's reputation, will ...

Thanks for the review! The "story unwritten" has a lot of uncertainty in my mind, so that's why the line about it changing the course of history is in there. ...

Well, the lousy characters aren't really in good stories. They're more like bad characters in poorly done stories, which only makes the stories worse. So a good story really can't ...

Yeah, this is still kinda rough, especially since I don't know where it's going. :) But the idea is more like a council of bad characters that are trying to ...

Thanks for the review! I know the wording isn't ideal, but it's actually an old work that never quite got finished (almost became the Story Never Written itself!) This really ...

Hey, AJ here! Welcome to the forum! These tips are super helpful. I hope a lot of the authors, both new and experienced, have a chance to read these. The ...

yeah, I suppose the "hunk of wood" phrase thing is too ambiguous. And some desks have drawers that lock. Ya know, for top secret stuff and all that. xD But ...

Thanks! :) I actually have had this around for a while now, but I never got around to finishing it until yesterday. It was inspired by a story that I ...

Ah, gotcha. No, I think that word works. I just was thinking brittle as in hardened. As for viscid, the definitions I'm finding simply have it as sticky (which is ...

I'm well aware of tenses and how to use them. :) I just wanted to try bringing out certain small sections of the story. Kinda like if you're telling someone ...

Thanks for the review! I've had a lot of people comment on the tense change, but it really was on purpose. I just wanted to test it out, and obviously ...

The present tense was on purpose, but I'm still not sure if I like it or not... Almost like she's reliving the moment. Also, Mablevi is intended to be very ...

Ha, ramblings are good sometimes! It helps me see the readers' thought processes. Thanks for the review! I think things would make more sense if you were able to read ...